Peer Review #2

Julia
Argument: Science proves astrology wrong
Strength: A lot of information, appealing to look at
Development: break up the big chunks of information to make it a little easier to read

Meredith
Argument: Photos are edited so much we don't even realize when we look at them how much they are fixed
Strength: Good photos, the first one shows a big difference of edits they really would make these days
Development: Add text to make a larger point.

Olive
Argument: Variety of images that represent each state, encourages you to see the diversity in our country
Strength: Looks really neat, images are good quality and interesting
Development: a few of the areas could use a small border, or in tight areas contrast the photos more

Kim
Argument: Selling UP unique products
Strength: Website has a easy going flow to it, different links and the slideshow of products. LOVE the background!
Development: check out the white space. Add a slogan of what is sold on the main page. (under title)

Katelyn
Argument: How a candidates image is gained during election
Strength: details I would've never know (makeup artist), interesting information
Development: I would probably connect the heads to the rest of the body to make them look a little more ligit, even though it may look like a bobble-head!


Courtney
Argument: To challenge yourself and write a novel this month
Strength: Easy to read, clear information. I like the font choices
Development: I don't mind the no-pictures, but maybe close up some of the blank space so it doesn't look like its waiting for something

Devin
Argument: Getting your meals off campus is less expensive, and better tasting
Strength: tumblr page is well laid out, well explained, well supported
Development: the graphs may help make info stand out, if readers didn't pick up on it in the paragraphs.

Sister's Blog
Argument: A space for the sister to share her thoughts
Strength: like the background, fun to look at
Development: can't read the title 

Jane
Argument: How today's technology can affect us both negatively & positively
Strength: easy to follow, straightforward
Development: some of the words that fuzz before disappearing was making my eyes hurt!

Constructive Criticism for Classmates

SARAH:
  1.) Major Argument: I think the major argument is trying to develop an identity for the Vocal Accord group on campus.
   2.) Strength: She has good skills, the logos don't look "homeade", they have a lot of potential
   3.) Develop: I really like the second one, I do think the colors need to be picked wisely or it will be hard to follow with the lines, etc.

CHARLIE:
   1.) Major argument: Recruiting for club indigo. Argument is that there is food, entertainment & social interaction
   2.)Strength: I like the layout of the slides, the variation in transitions
   3.)Develop: Definitely add pictures, will add a lot to the presentation

THIRD:
   1.) Major Argument: To show you the effects of the economy & the personal consequences of music piracy
   2.) Strength: The information is good, the colors are clear
   3.) Develop: The layout could use a little bit so it is easier to read. My head was spinning a little trying to decide what to read first
 
CASSANDRA:
   1.) Major Argument: To show you what goes on in "Greek Life", and all the opportunities you can get
   2.) Strength: The information is short & concise, but it fits everything in
   3.) Develop: clear up some of the fonts/colors, it gets distracting
 

Issues with this Project

   At the beginning of this week I was overwhelmed beyond compare. I had a topic that I was passionate about, but not a word from anywhere was coming to me and I couldn't think of a solid production idea to save my life. On Tuesday, after too many wasted weeks I had enough and changed my topic. I am now going to design advertising materials for my uncle Ben's shop, Halonen Lawn & Landscaping. If all goes as planned, it will work good because he is in need of an advertising solution, but doesn't have the time himself to start designing materials.
   Even still, I take so long for every step, which usually happens to me. I sit and think forever and at the last minute everything clicks together & the project evolves. I am going to try hard to stay ahead of the curve this time but my ideas are changing every few minutes so we shall see!

Statement of Purpose

    I want to design advertising materials for my uncle’s business, Halonen Lawn & Landscaping, using digital media mediums as well as a digital media production itself

   The audience for my project starts with first-marrieds who own their first home, all the way up to senior citizens who still care for their own lawns. I want to be able to catch anyone who has a lawn to tend, trees to plant, or landscaping they want to spruce up their land.

   The context of some projects is simply to inform, which I would like to include in mine as well, but his business has been around for about 10 years now, so at this point I am going to focus mostly on informing customers of specific landscaping projects HL&L can do for them.

   I plan on creating a Prezi presentation, just to tie everything together in one place. I’m going to use photoshop and other accessible programs to create a small handout that Ben would like to slip in specific mailboxes as he is out on jobs in subdivisions, towns, etc around here. Many people way over estimate the cost of some basic landscaping duties so we figured this would be a good way to get the bug in their ear that it is a very doable feat. Overall, I just want to make a few different advertising materials that he can have around to inform potential customers anywhere he is. Sort of like an quick and easy quote on-the-go!